Have you written something you wanted to rewrite?

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Have you ever written a scene where you felt that you need to rewrite it to be less 'sexually fueled'?, as in the feelings of sexual desire was so high? I just did that with my story Warrior Princess, but I have not rewritten the scene yet, I'm still debating on rewriting the scene or not.

The scene in question:

“I need to examine his remains,” Canasa said. “Before rot begins to take his body apart.”
“I've prevented that from happening,” Aderyn stated. “I have it under a chill spell to keep the decay from hitting his remains till you and Eskander had the chance to examine him.”
“Very well. I better get my clothes and when I'm done, we can examine him.” Canasa said, as she looked at them. Aderyn, Arion and Dreng nodded as they left the hut leaving Eskander behind. “Why did you stay behind?”
“I think we need to continue our talk from the cliff,” Eskander said, as he sat down next to the open spot by her as she had leaned on the bed after the others had left the hut.
“I think we should . . . after we get done with what we need to do,” Canasa whispered, fully aware that he was moving close to her face with his own. “Eskander, I think you best go?”
“Why?” he asked, his voice showing something other than talking he was interested in.
“Eskander!” spoke a voice from the door.
Eskander turned to see Arion standing there. “I'm coming.” He pulled away from Canasa and glanced at her to see her breathless. “I will be back to finish our 'talk'.”

Have you ever written a scene in your story that you wanted to rewrite because it was too steamy?
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sevenofeleven's avatar
No.

I did a scene and had to put a mature setting on it.
The problem with mature stuff, you get less views.

This is not steamy unless its too early in your story.